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Post  Sue McDonald on Mon Jan 30 2012, 06:58

Don't like this thing called sadness
it's really quite unkind
playing with emotions
also with my mind

I should feel really happy
those who think they know would say
though no way have they been through
or hear the hurtfull things you say

Tried hard to pack the pain away
leave it far behind though with your ''no words''
and his cruel ways
feel I may be losing my mind

Your day went well ?
I couldn't tell
did you know that I was there
I felt so excluded as through me you did stare

I served a purpose yet again
did the things you wanted done
worked hard to please tell me why,
why do I feel highly strung

I see you laugh
I hide my tears
feel sick inside
realising fears
Have I been used
to fill your needs
I'll never know
I'll never show
coz I can't hurt like others do
I try so hard to remain true
I'll let it pass again with pain
Hope one day some true recognition
I'll gain
I must somehow learn
to give to me
The love and hours that I give to all
Written with sadness
nothing to gain
It's just to stop me going in sane !!


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Post  mikeschultz on Mon Jan 30 2012, 07:24

Lovely poem. I like the way you use structure to illustrate the 'holding it together' aspect of pain, and then in the final stanza provide a cascading falling apart of earlier structure and reason. Well done.
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Post  Lucie on Mon Jan 30 2012, 08:06

well everybit what Mike said( if i may be so bold to steal 'em)
heartfelt honey! xx
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