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Post  peewee on Wed Oct 26 2011, 09:40

Shouting





Shout but they cant hear
Wave my arms but they don’t see
I’m trying to tell them I’m ok
But they’re not listening to me

I can hear them talking
Can feel them touch me too
They are saying I’m unconscious
How the hell can that be true

They treat me like I’m not here
Like a third party I guess
They wonder if I can hear them
I keep trying to shout out yes

Wonder how long I’ve been here
Wonder how long I’ll stay
I have so many questions
But they cant hear me anyway





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Re: Shouting

Post  jinettyx on Wed Oct 26 2011, 09:46

Very good Like red star
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Re: Shouting

Post  BC Williams on Thu Oct 27 2011, 05:03

I've often heard people in a coma may be hearing everything you say. I'm sure it's true . . . good writing Peter, about a sad subject. Let it be a warning to us.

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Re: Shouting

Post  Dori on Thu Oct 27 2011, 12:16

Very good poem Peter ! Like Like Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven
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Re: Shouting

Post  peewee on Thu Oct 27 2011, 13:08

It has to be the most frustrating thing when a person can hear but not respond, or worse to think they are responding but they aren't seen to do so

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Re: Shouting

Post  Lucie on Fri Nov 11 2011, 12:36

it often frustrates me, as much as those, trapped in a body of old age..
so young at heart and mind and yet if only they could share their wisdom and worries with us , how heartrenching to not see, really see that a person is still in there , 'dying' to get out.....
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Re: Shouting

Post  mikeschultz on Sun Jan 29 2012, 18:40

Nice rendering of a primal human fear. Good job.
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