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Post  Lucie on Sat Mar 31 2012, 01:00

Looking out of my window
as I sat upon the sil,
Across the way, my eyes did see
a lonely daffadil.
It arched it's neck towards the ground
and bowed before the sun
No other flow'rs 'round it, nor be seen by anyone.
It didn't lift it head and dance
And waver in the breeze
Just sighed towards the grass beneath
So still, amongst the trees.
like a proper living statue
such perfected flute and form
with no-one to appreciate
It sat alone, forlorn.
For daffadils, are social flowers
bunched in merriment
that bob their heads in a curtious dance
But this one, accompanied cold cement!
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Post  mikeschultz on Sat Mar 31 2012, 06:50

A lovely poem. I really enjoyed the way you revealed the setting in the last line and instantly brought a greater understanding of the images that came before, such as the bowing flower. Sweet. Thank you for sharing your observation in such a beautiful poem.

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Post  jinettyx on Sun Apr 01 2012, 02:53

Lucie, I adore the way you write with such passion about absolutely everything. Amazingly talented. clapping
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Post  Lucie on Sun Apr 01 2012, 23:52

Thankyou my friends xx group hug
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Post  Little Owl on Tue Apr 03 2012, 05:38

So well written, I feel sad for the lonely flower.
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