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Post  Dori on Wed Oct 05 2011, 08:19

Oh, so far a way in a distant land,
there stood a castle from days of old.
How long it's been there no one knows,
Only a few have lived in this castle.

Laughter is heard in every room,
even faces can be seen.
Footsteps echo throughout the halls,
of the one who built it.

Who does the laughter and foot steps belong to ?
Could it be the one who built......the castle so long ago?
To search every room and every wall,
for the secrets that it holds.

was there a battle here,
or was there a loving family that had past on?
To go to sleep with the laughter,
foot steps knowing that the castle is being looked after.

Will we find out who is haunting this castle,
of old or will it be forever......
A mystery ?


(FOOT NOTE: I have written this with 5 other chapters, I don't think chapters 3 through 6 are any good but I will leave that up to you)


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Post  Sue McDonald on Tue Oct 11 2011, 19:05

This is good also Dori although I do prefer the first one I read. wELL DONE clapping give flowers
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Post  Dori on Tue Oct 11 2011, 19:05

In order to know what " THE CASTLE: TWO" is about you should read "THE CASTLE" first, then go back and read "THE CASTLE: TWO"
Happy reading everyone... =) bird
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Post  BC Williams on Tue Oct 11 2011, 19:16

It's cosie Dori! I remember this from OH, so long ago:-) Good writing and KEEP it up girl! clapping

hugs, bev

PS: when you get all the chapters up, maybe we can link them:-)
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Post  Dori on Tue Oct 11 2011, 21:16

Thanks Bev, I'm going give it the "old Dori" try lol

OK thanks, but you know I HAVE to get them proof read by you, just to make sure it all ties in together...and to see if the chapters are in the right places...you are always a great help ! BIG hug bird =)
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Post  Little Owl on Wed Apr 04 2012, 06:35

Wouldn't you just love to wander through some of those great castles of old? I know I would. Your poem was great.

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Post  Dori on Wed Apr 04 2012, 15:00

I love old castles, I would love to search through every room for secret passage ways just to see where they lead to.
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Post  Lucie on Thu Apr 05 2012, 00:53

oh I am SO with you on that one, Dori..Pack a bag, lets go!
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Post  Dori on Thu Apr 05 2012, 04:25

You got it cuz !
By the way I think of everyone here as family, so you will be my cousin "cuz." lol
Where do you want to go to first, being I'm Irish & Scottish on my dad's father's side how about going to one of those places first ?
We don't have REALLY castles here just old manssions people call "castles."
Oh I am also French on my mom's mother's side as well as a few other things on both sides.
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Post  Dori on Thu Apr 05 2012, 04:34

Sorry about the goof up, this one "THE CASTLE........TWO" the other is "THE CASTLE" I have a few others but I need to work out the "bugs" before I post them, there is a series of 6 or more chaptures, I want to make sure they all make sense then I'll post them.

So read "THE CASTLE" first then re-read this one "THE CASTLE......TWO" it will make better sense.........I hope. lol
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Post  Little Owl on Thu Apr 05 2012, 16:33

Any thing you want to tour and take pictures of would be great! I have been to a few castles here, the one I remember is the Biltmore Houe in Ashville, TN. It was a guided tour so we only got to see a small portion. But, oh, just to have hours on your own would be the grandest of adventures. BTW, it was good to hear from you again, cuz! sunny
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Post  Dori on Thu Apr 05 2012, 17:47

I would love to go through the Edinburgh's Castle in Scotland, I have heard so much about it, then there is the underground town in Scotland.
Just to see every castle without a tour guide would be awesome.

It was great hearing from you too cuz sunny
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Post  Lucie on Fri Apr 06 2012, 01:30

Dori, I vow to go to scotland before I leave this world, the scenery and their accent just blows me away... there is so much history there.. yep Scotland 1st!
Getcha hiking boots on kiddo..
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Post  jinettyx on Fri Apr 06 2012, 03:24

I went to Edinburgh Castle last year, I huffed and puffed up the steep, steep steps, only to find that the gates were shut and we couldn't get in...!!
Maybe I'll try again someday when I can breathe a lot better... I was so disappointed! doh
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Post  Dori on Fri Apr 06 2012, 13:37

@ Lucie, I don't know if I will ever get the chance, to go to Scotland, or anywhere else over seas, so when you can get there please enjoy it for me.....But I will STILL I will make it my goal to go there as well.

@ Jinettyx, that's a shame, I hope that the next time you go they will have the gates open, when you do go and they let you take pics to share with us.
You will be able to go in the castle soon I bet.
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